Comments on: Checking In http://billmyerscreations.com/blog/2008/05/10/checking-in/ Thu, 20 Nov 2008 10:54:19 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.6.2 By: billmyers http://billmyerscreations.com/blog/2008/05/10/checking-in/#comment-10932 billmyers Thu, 15 May 2008 17:07:00 +0000 http://billmyerscreations.com/blog/2008/05/10/checking-in/#comment-10932 "I can tell you I like it, but I can’t tell you if it’s good poetry or not." Having lived with this rewrite for a little while now, I believe I can answer that question. It's not good poetry. Poetry is about using imagery to convey an idea or a feeling. The imagery I selected for this poem for the most part sounded cool to me on a superificial level. If someone asked me why I began the poem with the phrase "In the bosom of fire," I don't think I could answer that question. This is, therefore, a mostly poorly thought-out and ineptly written poem. Still, there is one gem in here. The second-to-last stanza is just about perfect -- and I can build something around that. That's enough to have made this piece worthwhile for me. I'm not beating myself up (since some of you worry about that). But I now recognize how high the bar is set. Reaching it will be a challenge. I relish the thought of tackling it. “I can tell you I like it, but I can’t tell you if it’s good poetry or not.”

Having lived with this rewrite for a little while now, I believe I can answer that question. It’s not good poetry.

Poetry is about using imagery to convey an idea or a feeling. The imagery I selected for this poem for the most part sounded cool to me on a superificial level. If someone asked me why I began the poem with the phrase “In the bosom of fire,” I don’t think I could answer that question. This is, therefore, a mostly poorly thought-out and ineptly written poem.

Still, there is one gem in here. The second-to-last stanza is just about perfect — and I can build something around that. That’s enough to have made this piece worthwhile for me.

I’m not beating myself up (since some of you worry about that). But I now recognize how high the bar is set. Reaching it will be a challenge. I relish the thought of tackling it.

]]> By: Sean http://billmyerscreations.com/blog/2008/05/10/checking-in/#comment-10860 Sean Sun, 11 May 2008 01:19:17 +0000 http://billmyerscreations.com/blog/2008/05/10/checking-in/#comment-10860 Wow. WOW. First, huge commendations for sharing that. Maybe five people have ever seen my poetry, mostly because I put some REALLY personal revelatory stuff in there. Poetry's HARD. I worked on one for a month straight, and still wasn't satisfied. Wow. WOW.

First, huge commendations for sharing that. Maybe five people have ever seen my poetry, mostly because I put some REALLY personal revelatory stuff in there.

Poetry’s HARD. I worked on one for a month straight, and still wasn’t satisfied.

]]> By: Jerry Chandler http://billmyerscreations.com/blog/2008/05/10/checking-in/#comment-10854 Jerry Chandler Sat, 10 May 2008 22:26:36 +0000 http://billmyerscreations.com/blog/2008/05/10/checking-in/#comment-10854 Good luck. It seems pretty good, but I'm not the guy to ask about stuff like this. Poetry is one of those things that I've never been any good at judging. It's like asking a guy who doesn't eat Japanese food if Yakitori is a good example of Japanese food or not. I can tell you I like it, but I can't tell you if it's good poetry or not. Good luck. It seems pretty good, but I’m not the guy to ask about stuff like this. Poetry is one of those things that I’ve never been any good at judging. It’s like asking a guy who doesn’t eat Japanese food if Yakitori is a good example of Japanese food or not.

I can tell you I like it, but I can’t tell you if it’s good poetry or not.

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